ShopDreamUp AI ArtDreamUp
Deviation Actions
Literature Text
The sign on the wall read, "Welcome to Anorexica." Jane looked at the sign, perplexed. She had never seen this part of Anytown before; she and John and their 2.5 kids had only stayed on the right side of the tracks, with the rich churches and the nice restaurants, the beautiful cinemas and the museums. Jane didn't even know how she had gotten here. She must've made a wrong turn on Main Street.
The heavyset minority crowd viewed her pale face and slender form with disdain. Jane Doe was definitely in the wrong part of town, where her looks were out of place. She turned and swiftly began to walk back the way she came when a hand grabbed her elbow roughly.
"Girl, how'd ya git so thin? Huh? Tell me how'd ya got so thin," Latifa Mosley begged, her dark skin sagging. Jane, with wide eyes, merely shrugged and pulled away with horror and pity in her eyes. She began to walk away faster when another hand grabbed her shoulder.
"Your skin is like porcelain," Jose Martinez cooed in a thick Latino accent. "Let me make love to you and taste that creamy pale skin." Jane shook her head frantically and pulled herself away from the man and the prominent bulge in his pants.
Mohammad Rafallah eyed her from across the alley as he put together his latest bomb, using easily obtainable elements and "The Anarchist's Cookbook." Jane shuddered as she practically ran past.
A crowd was beginning to form around her. All sorts of hands—black, yellow, red, tan, thin, pudgy, wrinkled, smooth—reached for her reverently, to touch her and feel her to make sure she was real and not one of the apparitions from TV. Jane screamed as she was buried under a mound of soft multiethnic bodies.
The next morning, the front page of the newspaper screamed, "Jane Doe, model of womanhood, missing!" The accompanying article extolled the virtues that Jane possessed, such as being a good wife, excellent cook, and loving mother. She had gone missing while going to pick her children up from soccer practice.
On the wrong side of town, Jane was becoming a Godlike figure, a Madonna in size 6 jeans and a tank top. All of the imperfect beings around her made a throne of plywood and cushions, painted it, and set it in the best building in the area. They forced her to sit and be adored while they went around their daily business. Every house, building, and street had a view of her. She had no privacy, and that's the way the masses liked it. They wanted to be able to see their idol.
When the Anytown police arrived to see if Jane had gotten lost there, the members of the community hid her away so that their queen wouldn't be taken from them. Jane was bewildered and frightened at first, until she began to realize that these people only wanted what was best for her. They truly loved her and wanted to serve her every need.
That was when she began to decay inside. Absolute power corrupts absolutely; there was no way Jane could escape the way her crown was thrust upon her. The more she knew that these people loved her and would do anything for her, the more she felt that she was deserving. She WAS their queen. And she truly believed it.
Corruption is never a thing that hits lightly; it is a crushing blow to the personality. And so Jane changed. She became tyrannical, forcing everyone to do everything for her. But her laziness began to show in her looks. She ate more and worked out less. She took less time with her hair and makeup, until eventually, she looked like the people she ruled.
One day, there was a community meeting in Jane's "palace". The people of Anorexica voted to depose Jane as their queen. After all, weren't they fine before they had a figurehead? Jane was shocked and frightened when the townspeople grabbed her and forced her to abdicate.
She then realized what had happened. She had grown complacent in expecting that she would be Queen Jane Doe forever; now she had to rectify the situation.
She began to dine on water and bread, exercising heavily and purging after she ate more than three slices of whole wheat bread a day. Soon she was down to a size four, weak and battered, but thin once more. Anorexica welcomed her with open arms as their queen again.
However, after she became their ruler once more, even though they begged her to eat more, she would never ingest more than three slices of bread a day, and she would work out until she fell over.
One day she dropped and did not rise again.
That was the end of Jane Doe, ruler of Anorexica.
The heavyset minority crowd viewed her pale face and slender form with disdain. Jane Doe was definitely in the wrong part of town, where her looks were out of place. She turned and swiftly began to walk back the way she came when a hand grabbed her elbow roughly.
"Girl, how'd ya git so thin? Huh? Tell me how'd ya got so thin," Latifa Mosley begged, her dark skin sagging. Jane, with wide eyes, merely shrugged and pulled away with horror and pity in her eyes. She began to walk away faster when another hand grabbed her shoulder.
"Your skin is like porcelain," Jose Martinez cooed in a thick Latino accent. "Let me make love to you and taste that creamy pale skin." Jane shook her head frantically and pulled herself away from the man and the prominent bulge in his pants.
Mohammad Rafallah eyed her from across the alley as he put together his latest bomb, using easily obtainable elements and "The Anarchist's Cookbook." Jane shuddered as she practically ran past.
A crowd was beginning to form around her. All sorts of hands—black, yellow, red, tan, thin, pudgy, wrinkled, smooth—reached for her reverently, to touch her and feel her to make sure she was real and not one of the apparitions from TV. Jane screamed as she was buried under a mound of soft multiethnic bodies.
The next morning, the front page of the newspaper screamed, "Jane Doe, model of womanhood, missing!" The accompanying article extolled the virtues that Jane possessed, such as being a good wife, excellent cook, and loving mother. She had gone missing while going to pick her children up from soccer practice.
On the wrong side of town, Jane was becoming a Godlike figure, a Madonna in size 6 jeans and a tank top. All of the imperfect beings around her made a throne of plywood and cushions, painted it, and set it in the best building in the area. They forced her to sit and be adored while they went around their daily business. Every house, building, and street had a view of her. She had no privacy, and that's the way the masses liked it. They wanted to be able to see their idol.
When the Anytown police arrived to see if Jane had gotten lost there, the members of the community hid her away so that their queen wouldn't be taken from them. Jane was bewildered and frightened at first, until she began to realize that these people only wanted what was best for her. They truly loved her and wanted to serve her every need.
That was when she began to decay inside. Absolute power corrupts absolutely; there was no way Jane could escape the way her crown was thrust upon her. The more she knew that these people loved her and would do anything for her, the more she felt that she was deserving. She WAS their queen. And she truly believed it.
Corruption is never a thing that hits lightly; it is a crushing blow to the personality. And so Jane changed. She became tyrannical, forcing everyone to do everything for her. But her laziness began to show in her looks. She ate more and worked out less. She took less time with her hair and makeup, until eventually, she looked like the people she ruled.
One day, there was a community meeting in Jane's "palace". The people of Anorexica voted to depose Jane as their queen. After all, weren't they fine before they had a figurehead? Jane was shocked and frightened when the townspeople grabbed her and forced her to abdicate.
She then realized what had happened. She had grown complacent in expecting that she would be Queen Jane Doe forever; now she had to rectify the situation.
She began to dine on water and bread, exercising heavily and purging after she ate more than three slices of whole wheat bread a day. Soon she was down to a size four, weak and battered, but thin once more. Anorexica welcomed her with open arms as their queen again.
However, after she became their ruler once more, even though they begged her to eat more, she would never ingest more than three slices of bread a day, and she would work out until she fell over.
One day she dropped and did not rise again.
That was the end of Jane Doe, ruler of Anorexica.
Literature
The Storm
What can you do?What can I do?...
As the rain falls and the lightning strikes.
As I sit and I watch
The downpour outside
And I think how unfair it is
That my mom made me stay inside!
You'll get hit by lightning!
But then I insist
She says okay be careful then...
I skip outside, and I start to dance!
I am just happy
A happy little guy!
As I dance in the rain...
Hail starts to happen.
It rattles my scalp
I start to run
The wind starts blowing....
Blowing me away!
I scream in fear
I should have listened!
I fly through the sky
And I get slammed to the ground
I get ripped up!...
By the furious twister!
It really kind of hurts...
Now I am
Literature
Burn
Akiko was on fire. Her flesh felt like it was pealing away from her body an inch at a time. She screamed as the heat engulfed her, but she did not fight it, in fact she almost embraced the flames. For too long she had been wandering with nowhere to go. For too long she had hid in the shadows, never drawing attention to herself. She had been awake for far too long, and now all she yearned for was sleep.
1899, Los Angelas Harbor.
Akiko stepped off of the ship and onto the American soil. The night cloaked her in the shadows and no one was aware of her presents. She silently made her way across the harbor, concealed within the darkness that
Literature
Storm
STORM
You threaten, "You won't do it."
Lightning flashes across my mind:
The storm is coming.
Fearful tears blur my vision.
Lightning flashes across my mind,
Filling me with defiance.
Angry tears blur my vision.
Rain pelts down around us,
Filling me with defiance.
Your threats are harmless, like wisps of cloud.
Rain pelts down around us.
Thunder fills your voice, but
Your threats are harmless, like the rain.
You watch storm clouds gather in my eyes.
Thunder fills your voice, but
I turn away unafraid.
You watch storm clouds gather overhead.
You say, "You won't do it."
I walk away, unafraid:
The storm is coming.
Suggested Collections
This is a story about Jane Doe, and her rise and fall as the ruler of Anorexica.
Comments24
Join the community to add your comment. Already a deviant? Log In
Overall
Vision
Originality
Technique
Impact
Good premise, but I think the story itself needs a little fattening up to make it flow better. The story goes from a 3rd non-omniscient pov at the beginning to a semi-omniscient 3rd pov at the end. At first it is centered around Jane. And then it starts to pan out and tell the reader what's going on instead of describing what's going on. Keep it focused on her, don't let it pan out.
To give the story more impact it needs more description. Instead of telling the reader that Jane grows fat, describe it. Does her wedding band cut into her skin? Describe how she becomes corrupt, does she throw away the photos of her children for this new found fame?
Right now the it feels more like a fat plot line instead of a story. I love the premise behind it, it just needs more depth and description. Keep up the good work and don't let progress discourage you.